Sunday, 16 September 2012

Cover letter

 Since, I am going to apply for graduate school recently, I post a personal statement instead of cover letter.The function of personal statement in application of graduate school is similar to the cover letter in application of a job. However, the structure and formate of the personal statement is completely different.




Apply for School of Engineering and Medicine, Stanford





Personal Statement: 

I often have “crazy ideas”.

Holding a glass tube of my own DNA extracted in the kitchen (learned from Youtube), I can’t help but think: it is this DNA that determines my characteristics and physical shape. However, is the trajectory of my life also defined by the sequences of nucleotides? The answer is obvious: No. Regardless how elegantly hereditary information is stored in DNA, it is not enough to convey all the identities of my unique personality.

I start to purify my DNA by tuning the concentration of salt (NaCl) to 0.14M. Suddenly, the tube becomes a timeless zone where my past, present my future appear spontaneously at different layers of liquid. Though different aspects of me are intertwined together in the tube, I see 4 floating words there which made me special.

Curiosity! I am constantly curious about mysteries of science and the beauty of nature. My father used to wonder: why did his son ask for an encyclopaedic book “Hundred thousand whys” at age of 9, instead of a fairytale book. My high school teachers don’t understand why this student spent most of his extracurricular time on investigating the influence of metallic liquid leaked from battery on moina macrocopa(a genus of crustaceans), which seems far deviated from what they taught in class. My project supervisor was surprised that her student worked until midnight on weekends to find out how E. Coli immobilized on graphene based sensor response to different external stimuli. I have a simple answer for those queries and doubts: passion for unknown. Finding a reason behind a phenomena or solving a knotty question fulfils my curiosity and motivate my further research.
     
Creativity! I think creativity frequently comes from incorporation of knowledge from different disciplines or research fields. It is especially true for bioengineering due to its multidisciplinary nature. During my internship in a research institute, I was involved in project related to cell enrichment using mircrofilters. One day, I had a crazy idea: following similar trapping mechanism, why can’t we use capillary flow in an open system so that we can isolate single cell and “fix” them in microtraps? With careful experimentation, my crazy idea turn into reality and I fabricated a prototype for high throughput single cell sorting platform for drug screening and other scientific studies. My creativity is not limited to research; I like to find new approaches and apply them in my daily life. For instance, I invented three interesting swimming styles: submarine style, jellyfish style and polar bear style.

Persistence! I developed a deep enthusiasm in the field of bioengineering. Even though I have encountered enormous obstacles and sometimes suffered huge pressure in pursuing my professional goal, my determination and persistence did not corrode. The most difficult period in my entire life was in my sophomore year in university. I had the privilege to write a critical review about graphene based chemical and biosensors. In order to make the review timely, I spent an average of 5 hours per day besides my heavy course load and extracurricular activity, investing into reading about 500 research articles, making notes for each paper, summarizing and discussing with my mentor. When I was frustrated by elusive concepts or lengthy paper, I switch the aspect of viewing problem. Similar to windsurfing, “storms” makes me stronger and advances faster. All my effort and persistence paid off in the end and the review paper was published in Chemical Society Review.          

Sociable! I enjoy talking with people with different background, especially about the topic of cutting edge technology. Learnt from 2 years of research experience, I believe effective communication plays the most important role in disseminating innovations and inspiring new ideas. I maintained good relationship with PHD students and my professors in school and my colleges and supervisor during internship in an institute. The good relationship in return facilitates my learning as they treat me as friend and hence are willing to teach me. In addition, many brilliant ideas come out during discussion with them in the laboratory. As the welfare director in the student union, I use soft leadership to unite people. Two of my committee members even tell me “you smile too much and you do not seem like a leader”. I like to smile and feel that it is the most beauty language connecting each other.

My DNA solution reflects iridescent color when I place the glass tube under the sunlight. There, my future reveals: after giving lecture to students, I come to my neurologic laboratory and experiment with assay containing in a glass tube, which is also a key to neurologic diseases.  

3 comments:

  1. Hello yuxin! As I do not know the way to write a good personal statement, I guess what I can do is to comment on your content instead! :)
    I like the way that you included only one main idea per paragraph. By doing so, you would give the reader a clearer understanding of what your entire paragraph is about. Also, through your personal statement, I do feel your passion in the field of bio engineering. This is very important as your reader wants to "feel" your strong liking for the subject before they would consider your application.
    Moreover, you not only had proven your research capability, but also emphasized that you possessed the necessary qualities(perseverance and creativity) of a good researcher. This would definitely increase the chances of you getting into the school as you showed that you have both the hard skills and soft skills.

    However, I noticed that you have used apostrophes in your writing. I suppose it would be best to remove the apostrophes(eg. don't and can't) in a formal writing. So instead of writing "don't", you may want to change to "do not".

    Good luck in your application!:)

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  2. Oh,Yuxin. First of all, your personal statement is so interesting and motivating. You use a bio-experiment to depict yourself, which is such an innovative way and attracting. And you're going to Stanford right? That's the uni that I was dreaming of going to. and I'm going to need to write personal statement 1 year later. Yours greatly inspired me, and I'm sure you will stand out from other applicants and get what you want!

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  3. I really enjoyed your personal statement. I like how you combine the narration of your life to the topic of interest. Definitely a big dose of creativity there =D

    I think there's a few things you want to check out before you hand in the paper though. My grammar is far from perfect, so you might want to double check it again yourself.

    The 1st paragraph:
    Regardless {of} how elegantly hereditary information...

    The 3rd paragraph :
    ...at {the} age of 9, ...
    ... how E. Coli immobilized on graphene based sensor {responds} to different external stimuli...
    ... queries and doubts: passion for {the} unknown.
    Finding a reason behind a {phenomenon} or ...

    The 4th paragraph:
    ...I was involved in {a} project related to cell enrichment...
    ... I had a crazy idea: following {a} similar trapping mechanism ...

    The 5th paragraph:
    ... I {switched} the aspect of viewing problem.
    Similar to windsurfing, “storms” makes me stronger and {advance} faster.


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